Anniversary Dinner at Denny’s

Maureen slipped her best dress over her head, zipped the back as far as it would go, and closed the remaining gap with a safety pin.  “You’re just as handsome as the first day we met, Clark,” she said to her husband as he used sink water and a tissue to dull stains on his black suit; his only suit.

“Those were the days. Weren’t they?” he asked.

Maureen nodded and finished getting ready. The room at the Hillside Motel wasn’t large, but it would do for a while.

Dressed for celebration, they left the motel complex and walked down the shoulder of Route 9. There was no sidewalk, so Maureen and Clark strode single-file and as close to the curb as possible. Traffic was heavy, but the sun was bright.

A mile down the road, they found Denny’s. It was only four in the afternoon so there was no wait and the couple sat right away. “Get whatever you want, darling. Get two dinners if you desire. This is our night,” said Clark.

They ordered dinner and an appetizer.

Full and sluggish, Maureen and Clark lumbered back to the motel and enjoyed the rest of the night.

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About mattdevir

I live with my wife – and inspiration – in Point Pleasant, New Jersey. I have written and produced television shows for The Discovery Channel, TLC, HGTV, and Baby First Television. In addition to reading my work here, you can also find it on Fictionaut.com, Istanbul Literary Review, and Pure Slush. I have many nicknames – Benny, Baber, and Beaver being the most popular. Every now and then someone calls me Faber. Feel free to use any of those. I understand my last name is a bit tough.
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2 Responses to Anniversary Dinner at Denny’s

  1. Your friendly, neighborhood editor says:

    Hello friend,

    1) “sink water and a tissue to dull stains ‘on’ his only black suit; his only suit.”

    2) Also consider losing the first only or adding to the second clause. I know what you are going for but it is a bit redundant/confusing.

    3) “Traffic was heavy, but the sun was bright.” I know it is a style choice, but this sentence is awkward.

    – Your friendly, neighborhood editor

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